This week's theme: Golden Girls
An eerie sound spread across the town. A deep moan as if the Earth itself writhed in pain. Moments later the ground shook and trembled.
Josh was excited. Maggie said she'd go on a date with him and he'd just finished his shower. He had been standing beside the bathtub wrapped in a towel when he suddenly lost balance. Something was wrong. The ground was shaking and one of the walls collapsed. He instinctively crouched and protected his head. He felt chunks of material hitting his back and then everything went dark.
When Josh came to, he didn't know where he was or what had happened. He felt a throbbing pain in the head and his left hand hurt like hell. He tried to turn around and assess the damage... There's little space around me but I can move slightly. The left side of the head is wet and sticky. Blood? Something must have hit me. At least two fingers on the left hand are broken and have already started to swell. Damn! Bloody earthquake! How will I get out of here? I must be patient. They'll search for me... I'll need water, though. The towel... it's still wet. I can suck it for a while. And there should be more in the tub... if only my head didn't hurt so much...
Time passed and nothing happened. Josh became anxious. He was cold and starved and had no idea how much time he'd been underneath. Panic started to set in. He wanted to bang those crumbled walls and set himself free but could hardly move his left arm. More time passed. He spent increasing amounts of time in a state of semi-consciousness. He was beginning to hope he'd just fall asleep and never wake up again.
Suddenly he heard voices. There was barking and shouting and pounding. He was so exhausted he couldn't move and he thought he'd just imagined the sounds until... something wet touched his cheeks and a raspy tongue licked dirt from his face. The face disappeared briefly and light entered his prison. More whining, that same hairy face with big chestnut eyes again, more voices... human talk! They found him!!! He'd be alright.
Maggie visited Josh in the hospital where he recovered successfully. She told him he'd been buried under the debris for 11 days and everybody had given up hope. On their final round Lady, a golden retriever, found him.
Later Josh and Maggie would visit Lady and his owner and they became fast friends. Josh would often joke about his golden girls saving his life.
(not happy with this - needs more polishing but I'll let it stay)
6 comments:
Well done my friend. I love this. Nothing better than a golden retriever. They are a beauty of a dog. And Maggie helping out. Truly golden girls. Love it :)
It is a sweet story and it fit the theme. I like it.
This was a wonderful story and so sweet. Such a happy ending. I really enjoyed it.
Oh my goodness! My eyes stung a good bit here {3rd to the last paragraph to be precise}! I really loved the build up and the rescue was crème de la crème! Golden in~deed and in our 'mans' best friend kind of way! Have a great week!
Ciao!
Allison
I was enjoying the story a lot, but wondering how it fit the week's theme. Nicely tied up at the end.
As for polishing, don't worry. No matter how long I work on a story, it always seems to need a bit more. Far more important to share your story than to wait until you think you've achieved perfection. I think you've done a fine job with this one.
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thom - well, thank you. yep, somehow i had a girl of the canine kind in mind since the title was known :)
quilly - i'm glad it works for you :)
nessa - i wanted a happy ending for a change... thank you :)
allison - that was the sweetest thing to say. i am pleased this worked for you and hope you have a great week, too :)
grandma - well, maybe i did stretch it a little. but i still think a canine friend with blond hair, especially when she saves your life, can be called a golden girl :)
thank you for liking the story, though :)
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